The picture so far is nice, the girl is pretty and cute smiling.
but give the girl the chance to recolour the hair before taking pictures as she is not really natural red haired.
now as you have a pretty girl who has a good expression, why is the picture so ordinary? without smile it's good for the passport.
because i do not understand the picture i'll pass on the rating of this picture, i don't feel qualified to do that.