I like this pict...it`s good... but.... I think it could be better. Well, unretouched is fine if there is no reason to manipulate. But here there is a reason to adjust contrast. The pict is to flat. I`m sure you could increase contrast without loosing detail. Allso, in my opinion, you should crop the top till under the rolling curtain and try to rotate a little to the left to straighten up the falling horizontal lines.
Finaly I think it`s such a pity to make a text line across the center of a pict. Why not place it at the buttom???
I did think of adjusting the verticals but then I would have distorted the model. If I had cropped the image then the composition value would have changed. As for contrast I take your point but then this is my personal preference. All your points are valid, thank you